Sculpture - Primate Change - Ralf Driessen
The sculpture is on display at Montalto vineyards, Red Hill...
This work was a finalist in the 2016 Montalto Sculpture Prize...
please - who am I
my story needs some insights
look me in the eye
someone must know why
I've walked through many lights
please - who am I
some propose a lie
but I need the key to rights
look me in the eye
some admittedly try
to research old dark nights
please - who am I
I can only sigh
please find some black and whites
look me in the eye
I can only cry
I've flown many flights
please - who am I
look me in the eye
Poetry form: villanelle
(I avoided iambic pentameter - as did Dylan Thomas - but retained the traditional rhyme scheme)
Linking to:
Imaginary Garden With Real Toads - The Tuesday Platform - Villanelle
15 comments:
This is an absolutely magnificent Villanelle :D Spot on!
Oh! So simple. I really like this stripped-down villanelle.
What a strange looking fellow. Well may he ask! Brilliantly imagined and written.
Your repeating lines work so well together as the final couplet. This is an interesting self-study.
The big question in villanelle form. Great
I look at the photo, I read your words. I repeat the steps. And with each iteration it impresses me on just how perfect this poem is for the sculpture depicted. And with a Villanelle nonetheless.
Such yearning... made stronger for the repetition of the question. It makes me want to know the speaker... so that I can answer. ♥
Love the sculpture, too!
I agree with Rosemary, he is a strange looking fellow, looking for answers. I enjoyed your villanelle, so well crafted,
I liked that you put the Senryū into the Villanelle format. Doing that forgives the rhyme not needed or wanted in Haiku and Senryū. :)
Also I liked the contemporary statue find. I would like to have a chess set with pieces crafted after this art piece. If I ever return to Australia I might try to go there. Surely they have a gift shop.
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A Villanelle so simple yet so beautiful...
The repeated lines work so well. An age old question, so well written.
Ah so cool--I've never read one with such short lines--you've made it work super well. Congrats. k.
a palpable lament ~
It's the kind of naked enquiry one would press upon such a sculpture and skull, with skill and more than a little of the soul-dentist's drill. And the harder the voice pierces, the more we wonder about this I. Until only the question remains.
... our life's mission. Some find it sooner than others - This poem obviously is the voice of one still searching, agonizingly so.
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