Photo by Outlawyer HERE
you seem
perplexed
frozen in
rigid emotion
shadow sylphs
drift round you
like shafts of
secrets
shaping your feelings
by default
but you know
those shadows
are like decoys
they begin at a source
but end
somewhere else
to me
your youth was dismembered
savoured
owned
your face
your ruptured face
so like
a vicious bite
in a delicious apple
and your upper lip
a knife
enjoying the sensual flow
but stopped
a little trademark
a calling card
you seem
perplexed
no eyes
to see my nightmare
no ears
to hear my blubbering remorse
no mouth of yours
can voice
my evil
Poetry form: ekphrasis - free verse
Linking to:
Imaginary Garden With Real Toads - In The remains of This Month (April)
14 comments:
This is an excellent ekphrastic piece. I love the description of the head as a bitten apple.
shadow sylphs drift round you
like shafts of secrets shaping
your feelings by default
Such beautiful lines here :D
The trophy room in Evil's tummy -- terrifying, but that's what the remnants of history give us, like those embracing mummies at Pompeii. A part of self in this remant too, where the surviving self looks back on what got lost. Great stuff.
The use of the apple make me think of original sin, and just maybe this is what's remain..
The part about the apple is so apt...great write!
really well carved, what a write;
during and after reading, you had me viewing the image again and again
well done!!!
much love...
Filled with such sharp and intense visuals, under your pen this fragment of a face says more than many a living one of what it is to be human. For me, the center of the poem speaks the strongest, the truth of the heart, but the bracketing beginning and ending make a perfect setting for that dark gem.
"to hear my blubbering remorse"... that adds a whole nother dimension to the story. Great take on an interesting picture.
Wow! a fantastic write!
The head as a bitten apple..takes me to Eden and then the struggle of sin (or I should say the struggle of self's good and bad side.)
I could stare at your descriptions for days... delighting in how your poems show every why... Love the metaphorical and concrete images you sculpt... the places they make me look into.
I enjoyed this so much, one of my favourite lines is
"like shafts of
secrets
shaping your feelings" It's true our secrets can shape our feelings, more than we realize. I chose this picture as well. I hope you enjoy my take on it as much as I enjoyed yours.
Shivers up the spine – for the right reasons!
This: "shadow sylphs
drift round you
like shafts of
secrets"
--what a great way to depict what's going on in this picture!
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