just leaves
leaves
lamenting warmth
like coloured paints drying pale
and scattered loose to the winds
like sunlight shattered
she
like sunlight shattered
and scattered loose to the winds
like coloured paints drying pale
lamenting warmth
leaves
just leaves
Linking to:
Imaginary Garden with Real Toads - Weekend Mini Challenge - Palindrome
Poetry Pantry
30 comments:
Wow!! That's so clever...I'm thrilled with the double meaning on, "leaves!!" Great work with this!
Lovely autumn leaves ~ I like how the second part takes on a different meaning with leaves, she just leaves ~ Wonderful palindrome ~ Thanks for linking up ~
Love how you turned from one meaning to the other seamlessly...beautiful piece.
wow...like the bridge 'she'...how amazing changing view...very smart palindrome...and beautiful...love autumn leaves...ths
really a great turn in this gemma...these are not the easiest things to write--at least not to get to make sense but you pulled it off nicely and gave a nice swing in mood from side to side...smiles.
Wonderful palindrome poem and paints a beautiful picture with leaves.
What a clever poem. I never knew one could write a palindrome poem but wow you did it superbly. Nice pic too.
Beautiful Autumn leaves can never be forgotten even left dry on the ground. Copper tone is an amazing color. Nicely Gemma!
Hank
hmmm...love the autumnal feel... leaves.
This is brilliant... and the double of meaning of leaves comes out excellently... seen as separate poems I prefer the second one :-)
Perfection in palindrome. Very well done.
This is a gorgeous poem, Gemma. the mood you have achieved is so affecting, and I love the sound qualities you have incorporated. The final lines are very haunting.
"she
like sunlight shattered
and scattered loose to the winds
like coloured paints drying pale
lamenting warmth"-- Beautiful....:)
I am totally moved by this poem, particularly the drying paints on a palate no longer used, flaking away. My. Thank you.
Love the cadence here. Well done with the prompt.
leaves just leaves...
Wonderful writing. :)
first... the picture is gorgeous... loved how this worked out... beautiful
Wow ! that was brilliant written.I do really admire.
easy flow tinged with sadness....
The photo made me think of autumn (my favorite season) and the poem made me think of those who have done just that - left their lives (sometimes themselves) behind. Just gorgeous!
easy flow tinged with sadness.........
I really like this! Well done.
A lovely palindrome. Here we are about a month away from the leaves falling......
I liked "like coloured paints drying pale" Very nice.
This is outstanding!
Perfectly done, Gemma. The repetition is so perfectly blended that we wouldn't have known it was there if we hadn't been watching for it, after struggling with our own palindromes.
And the photo is beautiful.
K
Autumn brings changes, the warmth of summer fades, leaves fall, and we greater sense the approach of winter's frosty nip. Well written, subtle and yet very clear!
Gemma, thanks for stopping by my blog. This prompt I didn't even attempt, and here, you manage a haiku feel while weaving a bittersweet picture of summer's wane. Really lovely. Amy
I love a good palindrome, beautiful imagery.
this is an extremely intelligent writing ... wonderful!
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