lines
connect
and protect
mark, guide and run
a wordless mission
a vision of silence
intent on being secure
zoned for reliability
just like the face before me right now
that has kept me close to his lines through time
Linking to:
Imaginary Garden with Real Toads - Weekend Mini Challenge - Etheree
13 comments:
This is an interesting comparison - the final lines really brought it home for me.
Really well done, Gemma--the metaphor's one perfect image coming sharply into focus in the end line. Thanks so much for trying it out and sharing with us.
.. 'zoned for reliability, security' ~~ if only we could snap our fingers, make it happen around the world. Fine write ..
I agree with Hedge and Kerry here...well done on image and metaphor fit to form. :)
I was just thinking yesterday how telephone lines like the one pictured are anachronisms in the age of wireless communication.
Really enjoyed this...especially the ending. Nice use of the form. My first time here--linking an old one that's here: http://liv2write2day.wordpress.com/2010/09/29/one-shot-wednesday-flight-off-of-half-dome/
Excellent metaphor!
This is great, Gemma. So nice to see you here in the Imaginary Garden. Hope you come back again.
K
Lines, what a creative write. "zoned for reliability" The ending brings it all together to perfection.
Love the last two lines., the detour strikes!
Can't explain why I needed this, this morning. Thank you.
strong imagery and metaphor. the lines so powerful here. I also enjoy the picture image.
the last couple lines of this are really evocative...it brings it personal...i like that....already read your Poets U offering yesterday so i thought i would drop back one...smiles...happy sunday
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