Within the blurry depths of misty realms,
Where answers seem to slip beyond our reach,
Where sounds and colours seem to pale and bleach,
Where past and future seem to lose their helms,
I love to wander side by side with fears
And feel the breathless pulse constrict my space
And hear the pounding silence face to face.
I love my halting steps with calm veneers.
It's here I know I'll meet my secret self.
The dark within will breed some living charm.
Perhaps I'll take that tome from my mind's shelf,
Ignoring screams of inner fire alarm,
And read about my pooka kind of elf
Who mingles fun and Gothic kind of harm.
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16 comments:
wow...really well done gemma...this kicks up a notch in that second stanza...actually i think that one is my fav...and meeting your secret self...and the living from the darkness...cool touches...
I specially like the last stanza, meeting my secret self ~ Good work on the form Gemma ~
We do sometimes like to venture close to the edge of fear and uncertainty, it gets the blood flowing! Excellent work, I especially like the "halting steps with calm veneers."
Lovely sonnet, and so true about seeing ourselves when we face fear (there's even a Buddhist practice, chod, which involves going to a scary place, such a charnel ground, in order to really examine the mind). I love that you write about fear, while putting a smile on my face at the same time.
Gemma, loved this.
I love to wander side by side with fears
And feel the breathless pulse constrict my space
Yes, walk with them, learn them, and ultimately own them.
I think we should all take the chance to escape to our favorite moments. What a wonderful response to the form challenge. Much enjoyed.
lIke Brian I love the second stanza - this is a beautiful sonnet
Beautiful writing Gemma. I like the first quatrain setting the scene. Brilliant
great flow in this...flows just effortlessly...cool on wandering side by side with fears...for me speaks about getting to know them and so being able to free ourselves from them as well
Not sure why but I read this and I'm reminded of Coleridge "Kubla Khan". Fear is our constant reminder to love. Great poem and nice sonnet.
I enjoyed the idea of wandering side by side with one's fears as a way of meeting one's secret self. It DOES make sense to me. Very fine sonnet.
Well penned..especially the second stanza as it seemed to hold the depth of the write.
What an interesting viewpoint, and great work on the sonnet! I imagine this as a metaphor for the discovery and self-awareness one feels when reading - opening up the pages of a new book, firing up a story, and coming to terms with the characters and situations that highlight your inner hopes and fears. Well done!
I , too, see the great use of the form here and the topic is familiar to me in that one of my favorite quotes is one by Eleanor Roosevelt - "You must do the things you think you cannot do."
Pure beauty Gemma - wonderful words that just beg to be read over and over again.
Lovely.
Anna :o]
(Love the pic too.)
Lovely language, matching well the form, with sonorous effect.
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