tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7691731886166698880.post8060841835383962729..comments2022-05-31T03:49:59.390+10:00Comments on Veiled Songlines : please - who am I?...Gemma Wisemanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17466540188839321484noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7691731886166698880.post-3213006466038347102016-04-07T04:02:13.885+10:002016-04-07T04:02:13.885+10:00... our life's mission. Some find it sooner t...... our life's mission. Some find it sooner than others - This poem obviously is the voice of one still searching, agonizingly so. Margarethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00007201357693227614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7691731886166698880.post-75413964086467967222016-04-06T19:07:35.251+10:002016-04-06T19:07:35.251+10:00It's the kind of naked enquiry one would press...It's the kind of naked enquiry one would press upon such a sculpture and skull, with skill and more than a little of the soul-dentist's drill. And the harder the voice pierces, the more we wonder about this I. Until only the question remains.Brendanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03983584155125369291noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7691731886166698880.post-32271715212411644442016-04-06T13:13:16.014+10:002016-04-06T13:13:16.014+10:00a palpable lament ~a palpable lament ~grapelinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14929030339206629628noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7691731886166698880.post-5747820198882925952016-04-06T11:29:46.407+10:002016-04-06T11:29:46.407+10:00Ah so cool--I've never read one with such shor...Ah so cool--I've never read one with such short lines--you've made it work super well. Congrats. k. Outlawyerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15698845661756444061noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7691731886166698880.post-37235054811398263152016-04-06T10:27:36.679+10:002016-04-06T10:27:36.679+10:00The repeated lines work so well. An age old questi...The repeated lines work so well. An age old question, so well written.Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7691731886166698880.post-5363607844777585022016-04-06T06:11:15.709+10:002016-04-06T06:11:15.709+10:00A Villanelle so simple yet so beautiful... A Villanelle so simple yet so beautiful... brudberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12563403553536472377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7691731886166698880.post-72127691509879685402016-04-06T05:29:27.852+10:002016-04-06T05:29:27.852+10:00I liked that you put the Senryū into the Villanell...I liked that you put the Senryū into the Villanelle format. Doing that forgives the rhyme not needed or wanted in Haiku and Senryū. :)<br />Also I liked the contemporary statue find. I would like to have a chess set with pieces crafted after this art piece. If I ever return to Australia I might try to go there. Surely they have a gift shop.<br />..Jimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02982249173214655060noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7691731886166698880.post-32955246891101191352016-04-06T03:39:36.985+10:002016-04-06T03:39:36.985+10:00I agree with Rosemary, he is a strange looking fel...I agree with Rosemary, he is a strange looking fellow, looking for answers. I enjoyed your villanelle, so well crafted,Elleceenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7691731886166698880.post-27776319165592501062016-04-06T02:31:42.800+10:002016-04-06T02:31:42.800+10:00Such yearning... made stronger for the repetition ...Such yearning... made stronger for the repetition of the question. It makes me want to know the speaker... so that I can answer. ♥<br /><br />Love the sculpture, too! Magaly Guerrerohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18295455026184103230noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7691731886166698880.post-74838251737060841312016-04-06T01:59:12.311+10:002016-04-06T01:59:12.311+10:00I look at the photo, I read your words. I repeat t...I look at the photo, I read your words. I repeat the steps. And with each iteration it impresses me on just how perfect this poem is for the sculpture depicted. And with a Villanelle nonetheless. Raivennehttp://wp.me/pPury-1Fqnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7691731886166698880.post-67828242292587605472016-04-05T23:51:23.856+10:002016-04-05T23:51:23.856+10:00The big question in villanelle form. GreatThe big question in villanelle form. GreatAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7691731886166698880.post-37949083437640324282016-04-05T23:31:57.849+10:002016-04-05T23:31:57.849+10:00Your repeating lines work so well together as the ...Your repeating lines work so well together as the final couplet. This is an interesting self-study.Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7691731886166698880.post-67012977380518139302016-04-05T21:48:31.562+10:002016-04-05T21:48:31.562+10:00What a strange looking fellow. Well may he ask! B...What a strange looking fellow. Well may he ask! Brilliantly imagined and written.Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7691731886166698880.post-82573531156933467102016-04-05T19:56:32.522+10:002016-04-05T19:56:32.522+10:00Oh! So simple. I really like this stripped-down vi...Oh! So simple. I really like this stripped-down villanelle.Marianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04030161532713347225noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7691731886166698880.post-30319992761367934742016-04-05T16:48:54.815+10:002016-04-05T16:48:54.815+10:00This is an absolutely magnificent Villanelle :D Sp...This is an absolutely magnificent Villanelle :D Spot on!Sanaa Rizvihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06681404650477409830noreply@blogger.com